Hunter again

Reworking Hunter.  I received a few crits back and it was rejected from the first market I submitted it to (with some interesting comments), so I figure, why not, let’s make it better.

That pesky first scene a few someone’s commented on, turns out didn’t live up to its potential because the finale didn’t really zing.  I’m adding zing. And my hero, Daymar, misses a huge opportunity to confront his commanding officer who is essentially his role model.  Adding that.  Then there’s a mysterious chameleon that was neat in the first version, but should’ve gone by the wayside when the griffon did about four revisions ago.

I’ll find another home for the lizard; this just isn’t it.

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